The ending left me wanting more. It did feel a little rushed, though. I think in the editing stage you should add a bit more to the finale and epilogue. Maybe the current epilogue is the last chapter and you could write a new epilogue. Just an idea.
As a whole, I really enjoyed this story. The unique setting and magic system were awesome. Lee's resilience was admirable and the highlight of the story for me.
I wish you the best of luck in publication. I'll be sure to review it on other platforms. Great work and I can't wait to read the next story.
Thanks Rob! In a very real way, your interest and comments were a big driver in pushing me to finish this story.
And yes, I agree that it feels rushed, and I'm actually already doing just what you are recommending: writing a new epilogue to add to this one (which will then become the last chapter before the epilogue). It's gonna be a bit different than the rest of the story, but I think that is what will make it good.
I foree many sequels and a wider acting stage for your fantastic creations. I love that you left the reader with two scenes of action that are unresolved, but I would suggest that you end with a tag that lets the reader know that there is more to come or even use the final moments with Lee to see us into the sequel.
The ending left me wanting more. It did feel a little rushed, though. I think in the editing stage you should add a bit more to the finale and epilogue. Maybe the current epilogue is the last chapter and you could write a new epilogue. Just an idea.
As a whole, I really enjoyed this story. The unique setting and magic system were awesome. Lee's resilience was admirable and the highlight of the story for me.
I wish you the best of luck in publication. I'll be sure to review it on other platforms. Great work and I can't wait to read the next story.
Thanks Rob! In a very real way, your interest and comments were a big driver in pushing me to finish this story.
And yes, I agree that it feels rushed, and I'm actually already doing just what you are recommending: writing a new epilogue to add to this one (which will then become the last chapter before the epilogue). It's gonna be a bit different than the rest of the story, but I think that is what will make it good.
That's awesome. If you ever want some more in depth notes, I'd be happy to help out. Looking forward to seeing the finished project.
I foree many sequels and a wider acting stage for your fantastic creations. I love that you left the reader with two scenes of action that are unresolved, but I would suggest that you end with a tag that lets the reader know that there is more to come or even use the final moments with Lee to see us into the sequel.
Thanks Sandy! I’ll see what I can do
Hope I didn't derail your thinking or planning. I'm just excited about the elements of your story.
Looking forward to reading the release version of this!