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Rob Mortell's avatar

The ending left me wanting more. It did feel a little rushed, though. I think in the editing stage you should add a bit more to the finale and epilogue. Maybe the current epilogue is the last chapter and you could write a new epilogue. Just an idea.

As a whole, I really enjoyed this story. The unique setting and magic system were awesome. Lee's resilience was admirable and the highlight of the story for me.

I wish you the best of luck in publication. I'll be sure to review it on other platforms. Great work and I can't wait to read the next story.

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Sandy Shaller's avatar

I foree many sequels and a wider acting stage for your fantastic creations. I love that you left the reader with two scenes of action that are unresolved, but I would suggest that you end with a tag that lets the reader know that there is more to come or even use the final moments with Lee to see us into the sequel.

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